Some people believe that it is responsibility of individual to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
A number of
people
argue that Use synonyms
taking
a healthy diet is the Verb problem
eating
solely
responsibility of individuals. Change the adverb
sole
However
, others claim in the opposite manner stating that it is the duty of officials to provide nutritious Linking Words
food
to their citizens. Use synonyms
This
essay is going to explore more about the two statements and Linking Words
gives
Correct subject-verb agreement
give
clear
view Add an article
a clear
that
why I voice approval of the latter view.
To Commence with, every person knows that 'Health is Wealth' if health is lost everything is lost. In Change preposition
of
this
and that era; everyone is enough educated and knows that it is his own Linking Words
responsibity
to emphasize on Correct your spelling
responsibility
healthy
diet, Add an article
a healthy
self discipline
for his own well-being. It suggests that individuals have the autonomy to make decisions about what they eat and how they exercise. Add a hyphen
self-discipline
For example
, more than half of the Linking Words
middle aged
Add a hyphen
middle-aged
people
in India are Use synonyms
diagnosted
with diabetes but Correct your spelling
diagnosed
besides
that, Linking Words
people
do not stop consuming Use synonyms
the
sugar products and junk Correct article usage
apply
food
.
Use synonyms
However
, we Linking Words
can-not
overlook the role played by authorities in keeping their folks healthy. It is the leadership of management to implement regulations on the Correct your spelling
cannot
food
quality, labelling and advertising.Use synonyms
For instance
, imported Linking Words
frood
products should be checked under strict supervision. Correct your spelling
food
Moreover
, public health Linking Words
campaigs
are Correct your spelling
campaigns
also
useful in educating Linking Words
people
about healthy eating habits. Apart from that, Use synonyms
ministry
can emphasize taxes on sugary drinks, subsidies for fruits and vegetables and Correct article usage
the ministry
restriction
on Junk Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
food
advertising. Use synonyms
For example
; big personalities should be pushed to advertise more about healthy products and they should be awarded for making Linking Words
people
aware. Use synonyms
This
is becauseLinking Words
,
well-known Remove the comma
apply
people
are role models of many and they can influence individuals in a better way.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, keeping ourselves healthy is our own responsibility but Linking Words
administration
can lead by running campaigns in order to aware Add an article
the administration
people
Use synonyms
about
the value of nutritious Change preposition
of
food
. Use synonyms
Thus
, help from Linking Words
government
is Correct article usage
the government
also
very needed to ensure that Linking Words
goal
is achieved.Correct article usage
the goal
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