Some people choose to commute to work by public transportation. However, others prefer to use their own private cars. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, there is
a
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little agreement among people
the
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way to commute to
work
via
transportation
. Some
due
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to
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use their own cars
while
others resort to public
transportation
.
This
essay discusses both views and will show why both are equally important. On the one hand, the advocates of public
transportation
believe that there are several advantages
in
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using
this
way to go to
work
.
Firstly
, it is believed that using public
transportation
such
as trains, subways and
tram
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is faster
to commute
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than commuting
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to
work
.
This
is mainly because there are no traffic lights which are responsible for all the traffic
jam
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on the road.
Secondly
, it is a cheaper way to go to
work
back and forth.
However
, I believe that using public
transportation
can be risky for people because viruses can spread much faster in closed and stuffy areas
such
trains
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and buses.
On the other hand
, there
is
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several benefits of using
own
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vehicle.
Firstly
, more and more privacy by using own vehicle, to
further
Businessman using own vehicle with only drivers or they
drives
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themselves to make the calls along the road till
arrive
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his destination so that cannot
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done
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in public transport ion.
secondly
, using
own
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cars depending
our
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decisions to make schedules to arrange our tasks.
However
, depending on
own
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car
make
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us to deal with traffic
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.
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. It's best to introduce your topic briefly in the introduction, present arguments or views in the body paragraphs, and sum up your own stance in the conclusion clearly.
coherence
Work on the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Use a variety of linking words to better connect your ideas and make your essay more coherent.
task response
Make sure to fully address the task by discussing both views clearly and stating your own opinion explicitly. Clarify your position and make it distinct to the reader.
detail
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accuracy
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Errors can detract from the clarity of your arguments and the overall effectiveness of your essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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