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most of the world 's problems are caused by overpopulation .Do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Overpopulation
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 has been a huge
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problems
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problem
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 for people
in
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 many decades and a part of
this
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alot
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lot
 of
problems
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are
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caused by it . I will
explian
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explain
 that
problem
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 in
this
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 essay,
i
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 don't agree with
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this
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 statement that most
problems
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 are caused by
overpopulation
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.
Body paragraph 1
Firstly
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, All the
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problem
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problems
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 around the world. It has been happening from politicians that
tries
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 to control
human
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humans
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 in their countries by using illegal power to force people to do what the politician would like to
chang
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change
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 social conditions and restrict human
right
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rights
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.
Body paragraph 2
However
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 , it is a note that with the right system and planning a lot of
problems
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 actually caused by
overpopulation
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 can be resolved .
for instance
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 , a
contry
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country
 like
china
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China
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 has
exelled
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excelled
expelled
 and has been dominating the world in many business aspects
despitr
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despite
 being the
higest
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highest
 population.
Body paragraph 3
secondly
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, a huge
problem
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 caused by
overpopulation
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 like unemployment and
environment
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environmental
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 pollution can be tackled with the right implementation of strict laws and good management .
In
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addition
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treds
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trends
trees
 are showing that we should be more worried about underpopulation rather than
overpopulation
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 as the
replacment
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replacement
rats
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of rats
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is being
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 decades over the decades.
Conclusion
in conclusion, in my opinion ,
i
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 don't think that
overpopulation
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cause
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causes
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 most of the
world
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world's
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problems
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moreover
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, it is the way
this
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 population is handled
that is
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 the
problem
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Population density
  • Sustainable
  • Resource depletion
  • Ecosystems
  • Urbanization
  • Demographic pressure
  • Infrastructure
  • Sanitation
  • Renewable resources
  • Biodiversity
  • Life expectancy
  • Fertility rate
  • Carbon footprint
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Emigration
  • Birth control
  • Global warming
  • Deforestation
  • Carbon emissions
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