You were advised by your doctor that you need to do more physical exercises. Write a letter to your friend asking him to join you. Why you want to do physical exercise. What type of physical exercises you are planning to do? Why do you want your friend to join you?

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Dear Annie, I hope you're well. I'm just writing to ask you about
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me for
physical
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a physical
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workout on the weekends because
doctor
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the doctor
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recommended me for my overweight problem. As you know , I am working in
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a fast-food
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restaurant as a manager .Despite
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knowing that
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junk food would
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deterimental
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detrimental
effect on my weight ,
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still kept eating fries every time on my shift. After
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months , I noticed that my energy level going down
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consult
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my doctor and he suggested to do physical activity to maintain
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the right
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weight and good energy level. There are lots of physical exercises on websites but I think
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trainer will be best for us . I know we both need someone to push us to some extent which will be possible by consulting
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then
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we can perform
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cardio work
out for
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to
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reduce our body mass at
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an accurate
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weight ,
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and similar
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exercises focus on our health issues . I really want you to join
with
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me because
i
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know you talked to me about your health problems
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lack of exercise . I
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think if we both
workout
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work
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together
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we can motivate each other and
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get time to chat
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daily activities . I am excited to start
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new journey with you and hope you feel
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. All the best, Roop
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Task Response
To improve your Task Response, focus on directly answering all parts of the prompt in your letter. Ensure to elaborate on each point distinctly. For example, you could expand on the specific types of exercises and why they're suitable for both of you, addressing all parts of the question comprehensively.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, work on the logical structuring of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should deal with one specific idea linked to the question. Additionally, consider using a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., however, therefore, furthermore) to improve the flow between sentences and ideas.
Greeting and Closing
To refine your greeting and closing statements, opt for a more formal or fitting tone considering the context. While 'Dear Annie' is appropriate, a conclusion like 'Looking forward to your response' before the closing 'All the best,' could enhance the overall tone of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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