The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, sweden, italy,and portuhal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the united kingdom, sweden, italy,and portuhal between 1967 and 2007
The line graph below illustrates the data
of
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carbon dioxide in the UK,
Sweden
, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The
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measured in metric
tonnes
.
Overall
, it can be seen that
United
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Kingdom was the highest country that used carbon.
Whereas
, Portugal was the lowest
according to
the given numbers.
According to
the charts,
at
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the first period of
time
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Uk was the first country in the line with almost 12 metric
tonnes
and slightly dropped to just below 10 metric
tonnes
in 2007.
However
,
Sweden
started with around 8 metric
tonnes
and hit the pecked at 11 in 1977.
On the other hand
, after 1977
Sweden
dramatically dropped to 5 metric
tonnes
at the end
of
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.
Furthermore
, Italy and Portugal begin closely with between 3 and 6 metric
tonnes
and both of them continue to
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. Italy reached
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just below 7 in 2007.
Moreover
, Portugal
also
slightly rose and
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with
Sweden
at the end
of the period, accounting
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both of them stopped at 5 in 2007.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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