The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the prediction of what will improve or get worse in young European society in the next 20 years in 5 different categories, which are health, air
quality
, water quality
, food quality
, and people communication.
Overall
, it can be seen that people
communication will be better in the next generation. Change noun form
people's
Whereas
, air quality
and water quality
will getting
Change the form of the verb
get
bad
in the next 20 years.
Correct word choice
worse
According
the Add the preposition
According to
the
chart, health could Remove the redundancy
apply
be improve
with around 40%. Change the verb form
be improved
However
, it also
could be getting bad with the
55% Correct article usage
apply
of get
worse. Wrong verb form
getting
Also
, in the next 20 years
the air Add a comma
years,
quality
could be the worst with 70% of the expectation to be worse. On the other hand
, people
communication has a chance to Change noun form
people's
be
improve with 60% Unnecessary verb
apply
of increasing
.
Replace the word
increase
Furthermore
, water quality
can be bad in the next two decade
Fix the agreement mistake
decades
according to
the proportion of 70 will get worse and the slightly 40% will improve. While
,
food Remove the comma
apply
quality
will be around 50% to be better and also
50% to get poor in a
next 20-year time.Correct article usage
the
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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