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Some Universities in less developed countries hire professors from well-known universities to improve the quality of education. Some believe that this is not a perfect solution and there are other ways to enhance the quality of education. DO you agree or disagree?

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Teachers play a crucial role in society around the world. Some
colleges
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 in first-tier nations
recurit
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recruit
staffs
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 to improve their
education
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quality
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 from well-known
colleges
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. Some people say that there are other alternative ways to improve the standard of
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. I partially agree with
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hiring
professions
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 from the top universities can improve the
quality
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 of
education
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 in developed territories because well-known
colleges
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 should have knowledgeable persons as tutors and
their
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 are the main
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for
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their
college
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 became the top universities by teaching
quality
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education
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, they can alter the student's Skills and talents by teaching very well,
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 learners have a chance to get good scores and enhance their academic performance. Needless to say, popular
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colleges
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 staffs can teach a standard of
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 when they work, so Some
colleges
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 in developed nations
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recruit
 them.
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, all famous
colleges
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 are not popular by providing the
quality
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 of
education
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. There are other
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 ways to enhance their
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 of
education
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 apart from hiring
staffs
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 from those universities.
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 means when
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a universitie's
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universitie's
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university's
 studies and syllabus change to practical
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while
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automatically it happens.
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Australia provides more practical knowledge than theory-based
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education
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 in order to
they
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improve their Standard of
education
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, and
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, numerous international Students Prefer to enrol.
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, practical exposure and focus on more practical-based
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education
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 can enhance the
quality
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 of
education
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. In conclusion, well-known college professors have more talent, so it will assist
to improve
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 the
quality
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 of
education
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although
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focus
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 on practical knowledge
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 theory can enhance the
quality
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 of
education
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, I partially agree with
this
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 statement in the above-mentioned details.I hope
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 brings plenty of benefits to Society.

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logical structure
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logical structure
Use a variety of linking words to show the relationships between your ideas, but make sure to use them correctly. Phrases like 'For example', 'However', 'In contrast', and 'Therefore' help to guide the reader through your argument.
introduction conclusion present
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supported main points
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complete response
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clear comprehensive ideas
Develop your ideas fully to give a comprehensive response to the prompt. Each paragraph should explore your main points in depth to convey a clear, well-thought-out argument.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate relevant, specific examples to strengthen your argument. General statements are less effective than concrete examples that clearly support your points.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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