The diagram shows the life cycle of a Monarch Butterfly

The diagram shows the life cycle of a Monarch Butterfly
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The picture illustrates the various stages in the life of
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emperor Butterfly.
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, there are 6 stages in the life cycle of a king Butterfly, beginning when eggs are laid and ending with the adult butterfly.
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the first stage, the queen Butterfly lays eggs on the leaves of a plant.
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, a larva or caterpillar emerges from the egg and begins to feed on the leaves. The next stage is a period when the larva continues feeding
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attaches itself to the plant. The fourth stage takes place when the larva is transformed into a chrysalis, which is still attached to the leaf of the plant. Inside the chrysalis,
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changes take place. After a period of time, a fully- formed butterfly emerges from the chrysalis and begins to feed on the nectar of flowers.
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, as an adult, the sovereign Butterfly is ready to lay eggs and the cycle will begin again.
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