The bar chart beow shows the percentage of Australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010,
The provided bar graph depicts the percentage of
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
in Australia of disparate Fix the agreement mistake
females
age
groups who were invovled
in Correct your spelling
involved
the
regular physical activity in the year 2010.
The graph shows that the Correct article usage
apply
women
are actively involved in recreational activities. It gives
that the male members are healthier than the female. The girls between the Verb problem
shows
age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
15
-24 do less Change preposition
of 15
workut
than the Correct your spelling
workout
work
boysbetween
the Correct your spelling
boys between
age
Fix the agreement mistake
ages
15
-24 . Change preposition
of 15
However
, women
do active
physical activity than Correct quantifier usage
more active
men
in adults.
In 2010, the percentage of women
working out has been raising
in Correct your spelling
rising
related
to Replace the word
relation
men
. The boys between the age
15-24 had regular physical activity about 52% Fix the agreement mistake
ages
whereas
girls had only 47%. However
, the adults between the age
of 24- 34 was
quite opposite to the previous one. The Change the verb form
were
men
was
not actively involved in the entertainment but the Change the verb form
were
women
is
active about 48%.
Wrong verb form
were
Furthermore
, the men
and women
between the age
of 35-64, the men
had less
active life than Correct article usage
a less
women
where the female members are active about
50% of all the Change preposition
in about
age
groups. Moreover
, the old males and females had equal sedentry
lives in the older years like 64 and above.Correct your spelling
sedentary
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