A friend is considering buying a house nearby, but you have decided to leave the area due to a rise in crime. Write a letter to your friend advising them not to move into the neighbourhood. In your letter: – Recommend that your friend not go ahead with the purchase – Give the reasons behind your decision to leave – Suggest possible alternative areas that you know.

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Dear John, I am so glad that you came to my house, and I know that you are very interested in moving into my
neiborhood
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neighbourhood
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I deeply you can be closer with me, I still have some news for you. Despite I have always felt that the environment and amenity
facility
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in my community are very good. Recently, there
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many robbery抢劫案 in the news
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. So I suppose that there is become no safety. I am worried about the impact on my property and children. I believe you can understand me, and you
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have children.
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I plan to move, and I think you can find a better place than there.
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, I am considering moving to a community called Ping An, which is located on Liulin Avenue and is extremely close to where I currently live, 3 km.
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, there are many shops here, and for those of us who enjoy shopping, it is absolutely a blessing.
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, the security system here is more complete
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where I used to live,
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the rent is higher. I look forward to you moving with me to
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new
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neighbourhood
and starting our beautiful life together, and I hope you consider my opinion. Best regards, Yours Lovelovelove, Tang
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Greetings and closings
Consider starting your letter with a more traditional greeting and expressing your happiness to hear from your friend. This establishes a warm tone for your advice.
Completeness of response
The reasons for not moving into your current neighbourhood due to rising crime should be clearer and more detailed. Include statistics or personal experiences to make your argument stronger.
Task achievement
When suggesting alternative areas, provide specific reasons why they are better choices. Mention the benefits of the amenities, community, and safety features in the new area.
Logical structure and development of idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph introduces a single main idea and develops it with relevant details. This helps readers follow your argument easily.
Coherence and cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas for better readability. This helps in creating a logical flow in your letter.
General
Mind your spelling ('neighborhood', not 'neiborhood') and grammatical errors for clearer communication. For example, revise phrases that may confuse the reader or lead to misunderstandings due to wording.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reconsider
  • unfortunate
  • incidents
  • safety concerns
  • deteriorating
  • neighborhood
  • increase in crime
  • personal experience
  • unsafe environment
  • alternatives
  • lower crime rates
  • amenities
  • community-oriented
  • recommend
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