Education should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All level of education, from primary to tertiary school should be free. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The
oppotunity
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opportunity
of learning
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knowledge
knowledges
from schools should
provide
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to
people
of different economic backgrounds. Some
people
believe all
leavel
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level
levels
of
school
from primary to tertiary
school
should not charge
fee
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from
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students. I totally
agreen
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agree
with
this
opinion. There are some
resaons
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reasons
why
i
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I
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support
this
opinion.
Firstly
, there are some
people
who
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whose
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family can not offer them to study in
school
. And
thet
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they
have to work and support
daily
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the daily
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spend of
whole
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family. They don't have
way
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a way
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to get new
knowleadges
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knowledges
knowledge
,
also
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and also
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don't have money to change their life. If they can go to
school
for free, they will less working hours and spend to
study
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studying
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.
Also
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they can use the time to do something
may
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that may
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change their life
such
as hold a small business.
Secondly
, providing education to all
leavel
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level
levels
people
can improve citizen's living quality.
People
can get
knowleadges
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knowledge
knowledges
of avoid
deaseas
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diseases
disease
and
fruad
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fraud
. There are many elder
people
be
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fruaded, because they don't
relise
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realise
words. It
becomes
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has become
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a big problem in
morden
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modern
city
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cities
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. In conclusion, education should be accessible to all
of
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people
of different genders, all economic backgrounds and all ages. When everyone lives with new
knowleages
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knowledge
knowledges
, it should
can
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help city promotion.
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grammar
Review key grammatical structures and ensure correct verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and proper use of articles.
vocabulary
Expand your vocabulary related to the topic of education. Include more specific terms and phrases to avoid repetition and to make your argument more compelling.
coherence
Structure your essay clearly. Begin with an introduction that states your viewpoint, follow with body paragraphs that each introduce a single argument supported by examples, and conclude with a summary of your points and reiteration of your stance.
cohesion
Make sure each paragraph develops a single main idea. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to signal the main idea to the reader.
task response
Support your arguments with specific examples. Whenever you make a claim, try to provide a concrete example to illustrate it. This makes your essay more persuasive and engaging.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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