Due to so many young people dropping out of schools, the rate of unemploymentis increasing, and it affects our society in different ways. In your opinion, how can this situation be improved?

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many young

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dropping out of

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has been impacting our society in different ways. Regarding

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issue, I propose several solutions that will be ventilated

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school accompaniment and

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family

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. Today's phenomenon in which many youngsters become unemployed since they have resigned from school has been

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detrimental effects

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the society they belong to,

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as criminal actions. To exemplify, a city which many uneducated

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inhabit tends to have higher crime rates,

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theft. I consider

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situation can be lessened by improving accompaniment from schools.

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of directly expelling students as a penalty, schools can give them lighter punishments,

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still assisting the students in that period.

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will lead to raising awareness among the students of their own

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. On the other side, another party needs to be involved in

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young

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have already dropped out from their educational institutions, particularly, parental

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is essential and

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, can not be neglected. Many unwanted cases in which youngsters violate societal rules are caused by the lack of family

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.

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, in Yogyakarta, there were groups of youngsters stabbing random

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with knives and when being clarified, some of them were coming from broken-home families.

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indicates the importance of parental supervision as a part of

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, counteracting the condition where young jobless

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tend to do destructive actions toward their communities, in my opinion, involvement of school and family is indispensable.

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, without it, the situation will not get any better.