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Due to so many young people dropping out of schools, the rate of unemploymentis increasing, and it affects our society in different ways. In your opinion, how can this situation be improved?

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These days the level of unemployment is rising
due to
 many young
people
 dropping out of
schools
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 and
this
 has been impacting our society in different ways. Regarding
this
 issue, I propose several solutions that will be ventilated
along
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this
 essay, including
to enhance
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 school accompaniment and
ensure
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 family
support
. Today's phenomenon in which many youngsters become unemployed since they have resigned from school has been
giving
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 detrimental effects
to
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 the society they belong to,
such
 as criminal actions. To exemplify, a city which many uneducated
people
 inhabit tends to have higher crime rates,
for
instance
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 theft. I consider
this
 situation can be lessened by improving accompaniment from schools.
Instead
 of directly expelling students as a penalty, schools can give them lighter punishments,
while
 still assisting the students in that period.
This
 will lead to raising awareness among the students of their own
conducts
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. On the other side, another party needs to be involved in
this
endeavor
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. In
the
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situation
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 where
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young
people
 have already dropped out from their educational institutions, particularly, parental
support
 is essential and
hence
, can not be neglected. Many unwanted cases in which youngsters violate societal rules are caused by the lack of family
support
.
For instance
, in Yogyakarta, there were groups of youngsters stabbing random
people
 with knives and when being clarified, some of them were coming from broken-home families.
This
 indicates the importance of parental supervision as a part of
support
.
To conclude
, counteracting the condition where young jobless
people
 tend to do destructive actions toward their communities, in my opinion, involvement of school and family is indispensable.
Otherwise
, without it, the situation will not get any better.
Submitted by misstiasclassroom on

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