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The map shows the plan of a library in 2001 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The images demonstrate the layout of a library floor in 2001 and the transformation of it after some amendments after 8 years.
Overall
,
while
 the most
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 changes were the addition of various
books
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 collections, video resources, and some digital facilities, the layout of the
room
 withness minimal alternations. In 2001, There were only three categories of
books
, which were fiction, self-help and history. Self-help and history
books
situated
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 next to
eachother
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each other
, on the left-hand
side
 of the
room
while
 the fiction shelves were
at the end
 of the
room
, perpendicular to them. In the middle, 8 square tables were placed in 2 rows, next to the newspapers and periodicals
stands
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 on the right
side
 of the library. The librarian’s desk was opposite the entrance at the bottom, and the
the
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stairs
was
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on
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its
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 right-hand corner. After the rearrangement, the most noticeable change was the expansion of
books
 in many new fields
such
 as economics, law, kitchen and children’s which were located on the left-hand
side
sheves
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shelves
. Fictions were relocated to the left
side
 to make
room
 for children's
books
.
In addition
, a children’s area, which was dedicated for kids to play, was added in front of
kid's
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sheves
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shelves
 and all tables which were replaced by 4 large
retangular
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rectangular
 ones. On the other
side
 of the
room
,
films
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 and
DVDs
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 stands replaced the newspapers and periodicals. and two new computers were added next to them, near the stairs.
Finally
, the librarian’s desk, the entrance and the stairs remained unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, room, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-service machines
  • computer stations
  • digital resources
  • book sections
  • fiction, non-fiction, reference
  • café area
  • repositioned
  • user preferences
  • management strategies
  • children's area
  • youth engagement
  • educational activities
  • meeting rooms
  • collaborative spaces
  • community events
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