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The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph displays how many citizens participated in 4 typical sports in one country over 30
years
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Overall
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, it is evident that there were obvious changes in rugby and tennis, the stability could be seen in two others.
To begin
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 with, standing at 240, rugby was recorded at the top of the list in 1985;
however
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, the number of people playing rugby witnessed a decrease. In the next 30
years
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, it dramatically plummeted to 50 people in 2005.
On the contrary
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, tennis significantly rocketed from 150 to 200 in the initial 10
years
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, followed by a slight rise to 220 participants in 2005.
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, basketball and badminton share an identical trend, which is stabling. Beginning with 80 the total number of basketball players was 30 people more than badminton. Over 30
years
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,
although
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 there were minimal reductions from 1985 to 1990, these numbers mostly remained nearly unchanged for the remaining
years
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 of the observed period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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