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the two maps below show a park as it is today and planned changes that will be completed in 2020 summarize the information

They are two maps, one
is illustrating
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illustrates
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tha
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the
park
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 as it
is
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was
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 today in 2008
while
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 the other
is showing
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shows
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 the future change in 2020.
Overall
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, the main change that will occur is turning the
grassland
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 into
research
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a research
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 and development area.
Also
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, cybersecurity will be enlarged. Today, the science
park
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consist
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consists
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 of different facilities
such
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 as
,
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apply
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grassland
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in
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on
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the northernwest
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northernwest
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northwest
northern west
 side faced by
officess
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officers
offices
 and reception located on the left side of the main road.
In addition
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 to,
southern
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the southern
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 side, we have the woodland, IT centre
oppsite
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opposite
 to cypersecurity on the east, above it,
grassland
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 and woodland. There is
also
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,
car
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a car
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park
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 located between the security and
bussiness
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business
 units. In 2020,
reception
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the reception
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 area will become the
univeristy
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university
 hub, office
stays
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will stay
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 the same. Another main feature is the development of cycle paths all over the
park
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. There is
also
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,
station
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a station
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runninng
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running
 downside on the south
were
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where
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 it used to be before.
However
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, all the
grassland
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 will be eliminated. The bus stop will be on the east.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, grassland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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