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The given maps illustrate the evolution of two neighbouring regions between over a period of 50 years.

The given maps illustrate the evolution of two neighbouring regions between over a period of 50 years.
The two pictures compare between neighbouring cities of Nelson in 2000 and today.
Overall
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, the
city
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 has been growing throughout the years in
which
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apply
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new facilities have emerged
such
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 as residence buildings, new shopping centres including a market. The
city
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 is divided by a main
road
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.
Also
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, there is a sea in the south. Previously in 2000, Nelson
City
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 had a few places. There was a university located on the north
side
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 faced by the
city
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 centre.
In addition
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 , the old market and a train station were placed on the west. There was a main
road
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 that
was separating
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separated
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 the port and the other areas mentioned. Nowadays, there have been a lot of changes.on the western
side
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, there is a large building designed for residents,
also
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, a train station is built between the bike rental
schme
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school
 and the university. On the right
side
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, of the campus area is a small building connected with the
city
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 centre by tramline and a shopping place
also
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 faced by another covered market.
However
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, the main
road
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 is now just designed for pedestrians only. On the other
side
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 of the
road
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, there is a restaurant on the left and bars and clubs on the right.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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