The given maps illustrate the evolution of two neighbouring regions between over a period of 50 years.
The two pictures compare between neighbouring cities of Nelson in 2000 and today.
Overall
, the city
has been growing throughout the years in which
new facilities have emerged Correct pronoun usage
apply
such
as residence buildings, new shopping centres including a market. The city
is divided by a main road
. Also
, there is a sea in the south.
Previously in 2000, Nelson City
had a few places. There was a university located on the north side
faced by the city
centre. In addition
, the old market and a train station were placed on the west. There was a main road
that was separating
the port and the other areas mentioned.
Nowadays, there have been a lot of changes.on the western Wrong verb form
separated
side
, there is a large building designed for residents, also
, a train station is built between the bike rental schme
and the university. On the right Correct your spelling
school
side
, of the campus area is a small building connected with the city
centre by tramline and a shopping place also
faced by another covered market. However
, the main road
is now just designed for pedestrians only. On the other side
of the road
, there is a restaurant on the left and bars and clubs on the right.Submitted by Abdulrahimmohamudali on
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