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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.
#information #car #ownership #uk
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information about
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car
ownership
 in the UK from 1975 to 2005 in the period of 30 years between 1975 and 2005.
Overall
, the number of people who had no
car
 saw a dramatic decline
while
 the trend of 1
car
ownership
 remained at the same level
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 the whole years surveyed. In 1975, 45
car
ownership
 of people who had 1
car
 given information outstripping the
car
ownership
 of no
car
 (nearly 45). From 1975 to 1985, data on 1
car
ownership
 had a rapid drop and underwent a noticeable recovery at 45. After
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a decrease dramatically in 1985, no
car
ownership
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at
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22. The changes
3
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car
ownership
 and 2
car
ownership
shows
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 small
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at
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 4 and 6. Both had a general increase with 3
car
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had
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 nearly 10 and 2
car
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had
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 nearly 20 from 1975 to 2005.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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