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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reportion the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the rate of
population
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the population
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 who lives in
cities
 of four different nations (Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia) from 1970 to 2020, with prospects for 2030 and 2040. At the beginning of the given period, the percentage of
population
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the population
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 who live in
cities
 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had
a
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the
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 highest figure among
four
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the four
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 countries, which recorded over 30%.
However
, from 1980, the rate of
Malaysia
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Malaysian
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population
 who live
is
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in
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cities
 gradually increased, recorded at about 80%, which will have a significant
increase
compare
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compared
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 to 1970. The rate of Thailand who
lives
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live
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 in
cities
 rose in a similar way to Malaysia.
Although
 the figure of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had a
briefly
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increase
 in 1990,
but
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it fell to about 40% in 2010. In the case of Indonesia, the
population
 living in
cities
 rose steadily, and it will
increase
over
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by over
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 40% in 2040.
Overall
, it is seen that the figure
of
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for
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 all counties rose and will
have
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apply
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a
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apply
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increase
 from 2030 to 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, increase with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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