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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Your next door neighbour owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night. Write a letter to your neighbour requesting that something be done about the dog. Include in your letter: •Your reason for writing •What you would like to happen •A nice, respectful style.

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Dear Anna,   I am writing in order to complain about a problem with your domestic animal. If I am not mistaken , your
dog
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 given as a present by your brother
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 week. Actually,
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 was
a
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 unusual present for
birthday
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a birthday
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, but your
dog
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's appearance is so attractive.
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, my family and some
neighbors
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 who are living around your home have been bothered by your
dog
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's loud voice.
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 to
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, it is too difficult to sleep at night
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 hearing barking. My baby sister can't stand to hear a terrified voice from outside. That's why she cries a lot every day. My mother worried about my sister's health because
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 strange voice might affect her mental health.  I would be grateful if you could change your pet or find some spare time to take care of the
dog
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 a lot. Please don't force me to visit places that are working on
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 solution. I look forward to your reply and a solution to my problem. 
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 sincerely, Nozigul.

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task achievement
Ensure that your letter clearly addresses all parts of the task. Mention specifically what actions you would like your neighbor to take regarding the dog's barking.
task achievement
Work on using a tone that consistently maintains respect and politeness throughout the letter. Phrases like 'Please don't force me to visit places that are working on this solution' might come across as threatening. Consider a more positive and collaborative tone.
coherence cohesion
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each addressing a single aspect of the situation. The first paragraph should introduce the issue, the next could detail the problems caused by the dog's barking, followed by a paragraph suggesting possible solutions.
coherence cohesion
Use connecting words and phrases to improve the flow of your letter. This helps in guiding the reader through your points smoothly, making your letter more cohesive.
coherence cohesion
While the greeting and closing of your letter are appropriately polite and respectful, ensuring the body of your letter maintains this style is crucial for an effective and courteous request.
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