You want to sell your laptop. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling the laptop Discribe the laptop Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it

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Dear Jagseer, How are you? It's been a

while

haven't seen you

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The

last

time must have been

mitali's

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Mitali's

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baby shower.

Anyways

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Anyway

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hope you

would

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like my deal, i know

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you

needed a good laptop

last

month. I'm selling my laptop as my grandparents gave

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me a

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present on my

last

birthday

with

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apply

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a new

macbook

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Macbook

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, so

basically

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basically,

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dont

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don't

need the old one, it will be the best opportunity for you. The laptop is in excellent condition and works perfectly. It's made

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DELL inspiration 14, silver in colour. It has

dual

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HD camera and the

seceen

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screen

scene

can rotate, with all the latest technology and windows.

Hope

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I hope this

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would

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work best for your office tasks. I think

this

weekend is the best time to chill out and have a look

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this

device. I remember

this

your's

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weekend off right? I've reserved a table for 8 in one of the best

restaurant

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in my city come with your mother and sisters. let me know if you could make up. Speak to you soon, Aksha

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Coherence and Cohesion

To improve your letter, it would be beneficial to organize your ideas more clearly. While you've covered all the necessary points, using headings or bullets to separate sections about why you're selling the laptop, its description, and the suggested date for viewing, could make your letter easier to follow.

Task Achievement

Ensure you maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout your letter. While the informal tone suits writing to a friend, ensure the language remains respectful and consider proofreading to correct any casual expressions or slang, which might seem too informal.

General

Remember to check your letter for typos, misspellings, and grammar errors. For example, 'haven't seen you?', 'mitali's baby shower.', and 'it's made is DELL inspiration 14,' could be improved for clarity and correctness. Regular practice in writing and revision can significantly enhance your accuracy and expression.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

Best regards,
Warm wishes,

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

175 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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The Closing

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