You want to sell your laptop. You think a friend of yours might like to to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you are selling the laptop Discribe the laptop Suggest a date when your friend can come and see it
Dear Jagseer,
How are you? It's been a
while
haven't seen you?
The Change the punctuation
.
last
time must have been mitali's
baby shower.
Change the capitalization
Mitali's
Anyways
, Correct your spelling
Anyway
i
hope you Change the capitalization
I
would
like my deal, i know Wrong verb form
will
u
needed a good laptop Correct your spelling
you
last
month. I'm selling my laptop as my grandparents gave a
present on my Correct pronoun usage
me a
last
birthday with
a new Change preposition
apply
macbook
, so Change the capitalization
Macbook
basically
Add a comma
basically,
i
Change the capitalization
I
dont
need the old one, it will be the best opportunity for you.
The laptop is in excellent condition and works perfectly. It's made Correct your spelling
don't
is
DELL inspiration 14, silver in colour. It has Correct your spelling
in
dual
HD camera and the Add an article
a dual
seceen
can rotate, with all the latest technology and windows. Correct your spelling
screen
scene
Hope
Correct pronoun usage
I hope this
would
work best for your office tasks.
I think Wrong verb form
will
this
weekend is the best time to chill out and have a look to
Change preposition
at
this
device. I remember this
is your's
weekend off right? I've reserved a table for 8 in one of the best Change noun form
your
restaurant
in my city come with your mother and sisters. let me know if you could make up.
Speak to you soon,
AkshaChange to a plural noun
restaurants
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Coherence and Cohesion
To improve your letter, it would be beneficial to organize your ideas more clearly. While you've covered all the necessary points, using headings or bullets to separate sections about why you're selling the laptop, its description, and the suggested date for viewing, could make your letter easier to follow.
Task Achievement
Ensure you maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout your letter. While the informal tone suits writing to a friend, ensure the language remains respectful and consider proofreading to correct any casual expressions or slang, which might seem too informal.
General
Remember to check your letter for typos, misspellings, and grammar errors. For example, 'haven't seen you?', 'mitali's baby shower.', and 'it's made is DELL inspiration 14,' could be improved for clarity and correctness. Regular practice in writing and revision can significantly enhance your accuracy and expression.
The Closing
The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.
Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.
Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)
- Yours faithfully,
Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)
- Yours sincerely,
Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)
- Best regards,
- Warm wishes,