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Band 5

Write a letter to a city planning manager about demolition of a historical building in your area and say – Explain why it shouldn’t be demolished. – Suggest a future use for this building. – Recommend a way to raise money for repairs.

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Dear Sir. The purpose of inscribing
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 missive is to request you to stop destroying the Palace of King Nawab.
This
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 place does not hold only historical importance but
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also
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 connected with the religious sentiments of people. As
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 we all are known by his name in
histories
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 because he was the
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 and brave emperor of our city.
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,
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 building can be used as a tourist attraction after some repair work. Through the medium of
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 palace, we can let the world know about the rich history of our town.
Besided
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 that,
student
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 can pick it for their research
works
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 and it will broaden their horizons about their own culture and history as well. Being the president of
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 club, we raised some money for its repair work. Apart from that, we can run
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 to collect
mony
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money
 from our town to modify it. I am sure people will help to preserve
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 building as it is connected to their roots. Waiting for your prompt reply! Yours Faithfully Raman

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logical structure
Ensure that your letter follows a logical structure by organizing it into clear paragraphs, each representing a separate idea. Your letter has a basic structure, but you can further enhance readability by expanding on ideas and providing more detailed transitions between paragraphs.
greeting and closing
Include a proper greeting and closing in your letter to maintain the appropriate tone and formality for the recipient. You have used a generic greeting and closing, which could be more specific or personalized to the recipient's title or position.
single idea per paragraph
Aim to focus on a single main idea or argument per paragraph to ensure clarity and aid the reader's understanding. Your letter does well in this regard, with each paragraph centered around a distinct topic. However, further refining and expanding on each point can provide a stronger argument.
complete response
Fully address all aspects of the task to ensure your response is complete. You have made a solid attempt to cover the key points requested in the prompt, but providing more specific examples and details can enhance your response.
suitable writing tone
Use a tone suitable for the recipient and purpose of your letter. Your letter maintains a respectful and formal tone, which is appropriate. Consider varying sentence structure and using a wider range of vocabulary to enrich your writing and more effectively convey your message.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demolition
  • architectural characteristics
  • cultural heritage
  • emotional attachment
  • collective memories
  • museum
  • cultural center
  • community hub
  • fundraising event
  • crowdfunding
  • heritage conservation
  • tourists
  • revenue
  • renovated
  • preserving historical landmarks
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