The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014

The bar chart provides information about the level of female unemployment in four parts of the United Kingdom between the years of 2013 to 2014
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The chart compares data about the level of women
unemployment
in four areas of the United Kingdom over a
two year
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two-year
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period, from 2013 to 2014. Most areas experienced
higher
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a higher
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women
unemployment
rate
in 2013 compared to the year after. Only Scotland experienced the other way around.
While
England
become
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the area with the highest
rate
of female
unemployment
in 2013, Scotland replaced
England
in 2014. 2013 witnessed
England
as the area with the highest rates of unemployed females, and Wales experienced the lowest
rate
of women
unemployment
, 6,8% and 5.4% respectively . In the following year, Scotland became the country with the highest
unemployment
rate
replacing
England
.
While
North Ireland was the area with the lowest
rate
of
the
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female
unemployment
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, rate, england with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rate
  • temporal trends
  • regional variations
  • economic policies
  • industry growth/decline
  • educational opportunities
  • social implications
  • gender equality
  • workforce participation
  • family income
  • employment opportunities
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