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The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of money given to developing countries from five organisations from 2008 to 2011. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The bar chart depicts how much
money
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 was donated to nations in development from five organisations between 2008 and 2011. The horizontal axis shows organisations named from 1 to 5, divided by colours and textures in the legend, where each colour or texture represents a year. The vertical axis illustrates the amount of
money
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 in
billion
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dollars
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.
Overall
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,
Organisation
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 1 and 2 increased the
money
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 given,
whereas
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organisation
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Organisation
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 4 and 5 reduced it, and
Organisation
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 3 maintained
constantly
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it constantly
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. The peak of donations to these countries was about 2,5 million
dollars
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 in 2011,
while
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 the lower value occurred in 2011
also
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,
however
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 from
organisation
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 4. There is an unbalanced distribution of
money
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 among the organisations and a wide range during the period of 4 years. The highest amount given by
institution
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 1 in all years was 1
billion
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dollars
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, for
institution
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 2 was more than 2,5
billion
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dollars
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, for
institution
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 3 was about 1,75
billion
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dollars
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, for the 4th
institution
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 was 700 million
dollars
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 and the
last
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institution
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 spent the maximum value of 1,25
billion
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, billion, dollars, organisation, institution with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount of money
  • developing countries
  • organisations
  • from 2008 to 2011
  • given to
  • funding
  • analyze
  • examine
  • discuss
  • evaluate
  • explore
  • highlight
  • summarize
  • trends
  • data
  • chart
  • purpose
  • overview
  • key findings
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