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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the
energy
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 usage in a typical
Australian
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 family and the proportions of
greenhouse
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 gases released based on
this
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energy
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 consumption. It can be clearly seen that
Australian
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 people use
energy
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 for heating the most but the
greenhouse
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gas
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 is emitted from water heating the most.
Also
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, the numbers of
greenhouse
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gas
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 emissions are more than the figures for
energy
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 used in all activities, except for heating
According to
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 the pie charts, heating accounts for the largest percentage, 42%
whereas
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 its
gas
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 emission is only 15%.
Nevertheless
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,
Australian
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 people use the second biggest amount of
energy
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 for water heating, 30%,
while
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 the
gas
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 released is up to 32%, representing the largest proportion.
Also
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,
Australian
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 people use
energy
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 for cooling the least at only 2% and it releases the lowest amount of
greenhouse
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gas
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 at 3%. The consumption of
energy
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 for refrigeration, lighting and other appliances
are
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 7%, 4% and 15% respectively but the gases released are almost twofold.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, australian, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average Australian household
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Energy consumption
  • Activities
  • Heating
  • Cooling
  • Water heating
  • Appliances
  • Lighting
  • Standby
  • Percentage (%)
  • Consumption patterns
  • Efficiency
  • Emissions impact
  • Renewable energy
  • Energy-saving measures
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Electricity
  • Natural gas
  • Emissions breakdown
  • Energy audit
  • Environmental impact
  • Conservation
  • Mitigation strategies
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