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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line
gaph
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gap
present
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 information about four countries of residence of overseas
students
 in Australia.
Overall
, all
student
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students
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 from four countries increase gradually.
However
, the
persentage
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percentage
 of
students
 had
the
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a
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 high position. Meanwhile, Malaysian
students
were took
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 the highest position at the beginning. Indonesia started from the lowest point in 1982 but
then
 went up
dradually
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gradually
 from 1987 with 3000
students
 it reached a
pick
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peak
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 in 1998 with 25000 people.
Then
 became the highest
amoung
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among
 other countries.
Malasia
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Malaysia
 started with 5000
sdudents
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students
then
improve
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improved
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 quickly till 1998 with the
number
 of 18000
students
 but
then
 fell slightly. Hong Kong
had
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fluctuated after 1998 with the
number
 of
students
 10000 in had standability
then
 finish with 18000
students
. Singapore started
with
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 2000 only but
then
 had steadiness. After 1994 the
number
 of
students
leap
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 sequentially and had
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a stabil
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stabil
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stable
 rise in the
number
 of
students
 overseas applicants 20000.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number with synonyms.
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