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Writing Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowladge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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According to
 some, it is best to accept a bad situation,
such
 as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money
whereas
 others view that it is best to try and improve
such
 situations.
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, bad
situation
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situations
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 are acceptable by some
becasue
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because
 of
it's
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their
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 wide range of experience and challenges that might be beneficial for new workers.
However
, some argue that
instead
 of accepting disadvantages, learning from
it
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them
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 and upgrading methods of
employement
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employment
 would be best for both the company and
employee
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the employee
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itself
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himself
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. In my opinion, it is best to both take and
inhance
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enhance
 the lower rank jobs.
Therefore
, both the workers and the
bussiness
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business
 have a wide possible
experience
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experiences
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 whether it's bad or not to have a
succesful
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successful
 product and a highly
rank
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 quality.
In addition
, teamwork and higher payment sometimes
helps
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employee
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employees
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 remain and boost spirits.
For example
, in daily life, various managers
tries
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 methods to educate
employee
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employees
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 and
told
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 some
reccomendation
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recommendation
recommendations
 for a better product by understanding
mistakes
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the mistakes
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 they made,
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and discuss
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discuss
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 them
together with
 others respectfully.
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Task Achievement
Work on creating a clear introduction that directly addresses the topic. Include a thesis statement that clearly indicates your position and previews the main points of the essay.
Task Achievement
Develop both sides of the argument more fully. This involves presenting clear ideas supporting each viewpoint before stating your own opinion. Make sure to use examples from your own knowledge or experience to support your points.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay in a clear, logical manner. Use paragraphs effectively, each starting with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea of the paragraph. Follow this with supporting sentences and a concluding sentence where appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas within and across paragraphs, improving the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Review the usage of grammar and punctuation to ensure clarity and accuracy in conveying your message.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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