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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree what other measures do you think might be effective

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As private cars are becoming more and more pervasive in our society, the relative problems
such
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traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and environmental
pollution
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 have drawn extensive attention of
public
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. Some people
alleged
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 that the best method to address these issues is to elevate the price of
petrol
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, and they have raised some evidence to support
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 opinion. But in my estimation, I don't agree with
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 view and I believe there are plenty of measures
could
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 be implemented to address these issues more effectively. It can be deduced that the purpose of increasing the price of gasoline is to oppress the use of
petrol
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, but we should not ignore that crowded
traffic
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 and environmental
contaminating
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contamination
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 are resulted from a myriad of reasons but not the consumption of
petrol
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 solely. Constraining the use of gasoline would not cause crucial influences on these problems.
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, it would pose some obstacles to public transportation, and bring some societal problems
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crowd's
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 dissatisfaction and
decline
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the decline
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 of
economy
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. Because
petrol
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are
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is
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 essential to both commuters and some
relative
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related
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 professions,
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 as drivers, fossil energy industries and fight industries' employees. Actually, the emerging crisis of
pollution
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 and
traffic
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 could be solved by some other measures.
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, governments should promulgate some policies to promote the
utilizing
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utilisation
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 of
electrical
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 vehicles, which can suitably meet the public demands of
traffic
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,
while
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diminish
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 the negative effects on
environment
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the environment
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.
Whatsmore
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, encouraging
the
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apply
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society to choose public transportation
such
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 as
bus
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buses
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 and
subway
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subways
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 could be a proper solution. The prevalence of public
transporting
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transport
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 can address both
the
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apply
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congested
traffic
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 and environmental
pollution
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.
Finally
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, legislating some pertinent rules to prohibit vehicles with some specific numbers to be
drived
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driven
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 on each
weekdays
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 has been proved an effective solution.
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, by
adapting
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adopting
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such
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 a method, Beijing has gained some achievements
about
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in
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 countering
pollution
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 and
traffic
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jam
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jams
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. In conclusion, I personally disagree increasing the price of
petrol
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to be
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is
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 the best solution to
traffic
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jam
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jams
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 and environmental
pollution
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, and I believe there are a lot of measures
can
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that can
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 perform better than
this
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 method.

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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance and offers alternative solutions, which demonstrates your understanding of the task. However, it could benefit from more specific examples to support your points. Consider incorporating real-life scenarios or data to make your arguments more compelling.
coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, your essay should follow a clearer logical structure. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by examples or explanations, leading logically to the next paragraph. Using transitional phrases can also help to link ideas more smoothly.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your introduction and conclusion are distinctly presented. The introduction should clearly state your stance and preview the main points, while the conclusion should summarise your arguments and restate your opinion more forcefully. This will help in making your essay more cohesive and coherent.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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