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The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognised as increasingnumbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity?

#importance #biodiversity #increasingnumbers #species #threat
In recent years, increasing numbers of species come under threat. And we can have a safe environment are ways to maintain
biodiversity
. In my
opinion
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 a safe
dimate
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climate
 is the best idea to keep
biodiversity
 on our earth.so the government should impose strict laws to punish environmentally harmful acts of factories or propaganda organizations to raise people's awareness. And local authorities should
also
 encourage residents to clean the street or plant many trees. It
not
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 only the government that people and children should
also
 find solutions to prevent extinction.
For example
, schools should include
environment
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environmental
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 protection in teaching to form children's awareness of preserving the ecosystem
form
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from
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 an early age. on farmers limit the use of chemicals on crops,.. In conclusion, under the threat of destroying
biodiversity
, people should limit the use of chemicals and discharge of industrial waste into the environment, not illegally cut down forests, and exploit resources reasonably.
That is
 the best solution to protect
biodiversity
.
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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Your introduction should clearly state the focus of your essay, and your conclusion should summarise your main points effectively.
coherence
Develop a logical flow between paragraphs and within paragraphs. Use transitional phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs more smoothly.
task response
Fully address the prompt by discussing specific actions that can be taken to maintain biodiversity, including by individuals, governments, and organizations. Provide more specific examples and explanations to support your ideas.
language
Pay attention to grammatical accuracy and vocabulary range. Consider revising sentences that are unclear or grammatically incorrect, and try to use a wider variety of vocabulary related to the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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