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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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technologies
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technological
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 era ,more and more individuals tend to buy things on the
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internet
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Internet
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 and
this
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 is becoming
famous
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trends
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trend
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.I think
this
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 shopping online paces have more advantages than
the
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apply
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disadvantages in spite of two factors
such
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 as
time
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efficient
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efficiency
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 and wider selection.In the next paragraph ,I will
dicuss
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discuss
 the reason for
this
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 in detail.
To begin
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 with ,nowadays shopping through
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the internet
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internet
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are
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is
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 getting popular either in the older or younger generations because of
many
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the many
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 benefits
in
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of
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this
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.
Firstly
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,
time
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 is important for every person because
time
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 is precious and cannot be wasted.As for busy
schedule
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schedules
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 parents
is
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usually do not have much
time
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for doing
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to do
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 their groceries in person so they have to do it
by
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apply
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online.
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 , a single mother has to provide needs
to
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of
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 her kids by doing multiple jobs and
by
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apply
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doing online groceries or
order
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ordering
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 online foods can save more
time
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 and less tired.Next ,digital shopping
have
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has
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 more various choices than shopping in the shops because
cosumers
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customers
 can shop online through international
wedsite
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websites
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 and have the items
ship
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shipped
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 to their hometown.
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 ,a limited book can only be bought on the
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internet
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Internet
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 and cannot be found in
the
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apply
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local
book stores
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bookstores
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.
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 ,there is a
disadvantages
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disadvantage
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for
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to
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the
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apply
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online shipping which is
delaying
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delays
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 in delivery
on
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of
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 the objects ,unlike buying from
the
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apply
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physical stores where the purchase is immediate .
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 ,when buying from the
internet
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such
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 as clothes usually take up to 5 days to deliver but
unfortunely
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unfortunately
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deliver
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delivery
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 date is being extended. In conclusion ,the phenomena of online shopping have more merits
far
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that far
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 outweigh the demerits ,especially considering the
time
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 saving and numerous choices for the people.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • product selection
  • geographic limitations
  • price comparisons
  • physical inspection
  • customer satisfaction
  • delivery delay
  • online fraud
  • scams
  • trusted websites
  • notable disadvantages
  • increasingly popular
  • beneficial method
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