The table below show information about age, average in come per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

The table below show information about age, average in come per person and population below poverty line in three states in the USA. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant
The provided graph illustrates the data about youngsters, people 60 plus, average revenue per person and the poor in
California
,
Utah
and
Florida
. Units are measured in
percentage
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percentages
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and dollars.
Overall
, almost all categories of
Utah
show the lowest point, except in
term
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terms
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of
aged
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under 18.
Additionally
, the figures for
California
and
Florida
in aged under 18 and average income remain approximately the same information.
According to
the table, the percentage of young people in
Utah
reaches a peak
with
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of
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28%,
whereas
the proportion of older people aged over 60 shows the lowest point at 8%. The figure for
youngers
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young people
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in
California
and
Florida
has more or less similar
percentage
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percentages
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with 17% and 16%.
However
, the proportion of older adults in
Florida
is 10 % more than in
California
.
On the other hand
, the average income in
Utah
amounts to just 17.000$, and it’s the smallest amount among other states,
while
this
category for
California
and
Florida
is around 25.000$.
Moreover
,
nation
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the nation
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below
poverty
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the poverty
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line in
Utah
is just 9%. Yet, there are 16% and 12%
the
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of the
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poor in
California
and
Florida
respectively.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words california, utah, florida with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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