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The bar chart below shows the percentafe of australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentafe of australian men and women in diffrent age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of Australian men and women, who exercised regularly in 2010
,
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apply
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 and categorizes
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them in
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in
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into
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 six age groups.
Overall
Linking Words
, approximately half of the population did physical activities regularly, with men
tend
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tending
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 to do more physical activity in almost all age groups, except in the youngest group.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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