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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials Thea were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph demonstrates the recycling rate for four various materials from 1982 to 2010 in the various countries.
Overall
, we can observe that
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the aluminum
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aluminum
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aluminium
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 cans rate increased sharply, but
other
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the other
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materials
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percentage
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 just made a few changes.
Firstly
, we can indicate that paper, cardboard and glass containers appeared in 1982. The percentage of organic and glass materials was similar to each other. The blue graph has a fluctuation tendency since 1982. For the first 10 years it reached 70
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 level, but returned to the old proportions. In the
last
 20
years
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 the highest per cent was 80. After that, the level decreased steadily until 2010. In the first 8 years
glass
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containers
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 range fell down to 40 per cent,
then
 since 1990 it started to
raise
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 slowly.
Secondly
,
the
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aluminum cans and plastics
formed
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 in 1986 and 1990. The green graph has a stable growth over all periods of time and reached about 45 per cent in the end.
On the other hand
, plastic tendency has a very slow growth during a
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 period.
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