The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The bar chart illustrates how much families spend on weekly income in multifarious items
an
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unknown nation over the period of 1968 and 2018.
Overall
it is clear that
the
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past period people spent
the
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huge
amount
on food
whereas
after fifty years people spent the most
amount
on leisure, housing and transport. In detail, in 1968, food was the most basic thing, so people paid huge
amount
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amounts
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while
fuel and power
was
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were
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the least
expenses
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expensive
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, at just above one-third and around 7 per
cent
as well as
food
expenses
and fuel were reduced by 17 and 5 per
cent
in 2018. Leisure
expenses
was
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were
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the highest
amount
in 2018,
which accounts
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accounting
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for nearly 22 per
cent
and it had only almost 9% in 1968.
In contrast
, travelling and housing
expenses
were
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increased in 2018 than 1968, which was increased by almost 14 and 19 per
cent
respectively. Surprisingly, household goods
were
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maintained the same
amount
on
weekends
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weekend
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expenses
, at nearly 9%.
In addition
, personal items and clothing and footwear
we're
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were
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reduced in 2018 as compared to
in
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1968, which was 4 and 5 per
cent
respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, expenses, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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