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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The bar chart illustrates how much families spend on weekly income in multifarious items
an
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in an
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 unknown nation over the period of 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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it is clear that
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the
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in the
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 past period people spent
the
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a
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 huge
amount
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 on food
whereas
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 after fifty years people spent the most
amount
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 on leisure, housing and transport. In detail, in 1968, food was the most basic thing, so people paid huge
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amount
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amounts
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while
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 fuel and power
was
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were
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 the least
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expenses
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expensive
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, at just above one-third and around 7 per
cent
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as well as
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 food
expenses
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 and fuel were reduced by 17 and 5 per
cent
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 in 2018. Leisure
expenses
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was
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were
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 the highest
amount
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 in 2018,
which accounts
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accounting
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 for nearly 22 per
cent
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 and it had only almost 9% in 1968.
In contrast
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, travelling and housing
expenses
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were
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apply
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increased in 2018 than 1968, which was increased by almost 14 and 19 per
cent
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 respectively. Surprisingly, household goods
were
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maintained the same
amount
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 on
weekends
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weekend
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expenses
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, at nearly 9%.
In addition
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, personal items and clothing and footwear
we're
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were
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 reduced in 2018 as compared to
in
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apply
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1968, which was 4 and 5 per
cent
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 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, expenses, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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