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Technology is a part of daily life. To what extent do you agree.

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Living in a digitalized era ,
Technology
 has become
apart
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a part
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 of our
day to day
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day-to-day
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lives
 and is seen as a necessity since it makes life more efficient and productive . There have been a lot of technological developments in the past years till today in terms of automobiles , mobile phones , computers and several machines that make our
lives
 easier. I totally agree that it is now part of our daily
lives
due to
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 the following reasons ;
To begin
 with , communication is now easier and more efficient
due to
 the introduction of mobile phones , computers and different software . People can easily catch up from different areas of the world from just
one
 voice or video call away ,
one
 doesn't have to travel miles to relay a message . Emails are now greatly used than postal mail which saves a lot of time and improves relationships.
Therefore
 , a mobile phone or computer is now seen as a necessity and
one
 cannot live without them .
Furthermore
 , in a
fast paced
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 world where people are always on the move , it saves a lot of time .
For
instance
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 work
that is
 usually done by 5 employees in an hour can now be done by
one
machines
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machine
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 in 20 Minutes. In
a
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the
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 case of a laundry business , washing machines and dryers are deployed ,
run
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and run
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 by a professional to produce great output in a very short period of time
thus
 making more money and retaining clients.
Lastly
 ,
Technology
 has created various opportunities
especially
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, especially
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 in the Information
technology
 sector
as well as
 social media. There's an increase in the number of digital influencers that promote content for business
as well as
 a change in the marketing strategy . People are now able to earn a living from
technology
thus
 making it a part of our daily
lives
 . In conclusion ,
Technology
 is a part of our daily
lives
 to a greater extent as it promotes efficiency ,
effectives
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effectiveness
effective
as well as
 productivity and makes
ones
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one's
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 life better and easier .
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