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Young people should seek the guidance of older individuals than younger ones. Whether you agree or disagree?

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Guidance may lead
one
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 in a good
way
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 or indulge someone in a bad
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. Being guided is good but how
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 is being guided by whom is the big
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. First of all, being guided by someone experienced is an advantage. Here we are talking about older individuals. Since these persons already went through many life experiences, they may be of good help to younger
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one
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.
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, they may
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 prevent the younger
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one
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to discover
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from discovering
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 their own path by
sometime
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 creating fear
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unknown
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the unknown
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. As a coun having two faces, being guided by younger ones can benefit in a
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 that they understand the actual
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 of living and
adapts
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 themselves to it. So, they may guide
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 the generations
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 is situated.
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,
one
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 must be very careful to whom
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 is letting oneself opened
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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