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Band 5.5

You just moved to a new city to begin a new job. write a letter to a friend. In your letter tell you friend about your job. describe the neighborhood where you will live. Invite him or her to visit you. Write at least 150 words

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Dear Rahul, I hope you are doing well, it's been a long time since we met. I am writing to share some exciting news regarding my new job. I recently got a new job in my field and the job is mainly focused on coding tasks and testing the code developed by myself. There are many other things which are related to my role like client meetings, vendor meetings and some technical support work. My company suggested
me
Correct pronoun usage
I

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 to move
in
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apply

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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a driveble area
nearby
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near

The word nearby doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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by
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to

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 the office and
suprisingly
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surprisingly

If you don’t want suprisingly to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

, the office is
nearby
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near

The word nearby doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 your house. I have now moved to Toronto and it's really a nice city to live in. I live in Scarborough where the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood

The spelling of neighborhood is a non-British variant. For consistency, consider replacing it with the British English spelling.

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 is really nice and the
house mates
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housemates

The word house mates seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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 are
also
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 very helpful. Since you are already in Toronto, let's catch up
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Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 weekend
according to
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 your schedule and availability. I'll send you my address in a text message. Thanks, Tirth

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Task Achievement
To enhance your task achievement, ensure that each part of the prompt is fully developed. While you touched on all aspects, expanding on your neighborhood's description could make your letter more engaging and comprehensive.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, try to create smoother transitions between topics and paragraphs. Although your letter has a clear structure, linking sentences could improve the flow and connections between ideas.
Overall Writing Improvement
Consider varying your sentence structures to make your writing more dynamic. Additionally, incorporating more detailed descriptions and personal reflections could enhance the reader's experience and engagement with your letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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