The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the spending of UK residents on visits abroad between 1993 and 2013.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how much people from the United Kingdom spent during their foreign stay from 1993 to 2013.
Overall
, their spending on holiday stood the highest and showed the most dramatic boost
while
that of business and visiting friends and relatives rose more mildly. Others remained the lowest with only a minor increase. Starting with the highest, the figure for holidays rose in a dynamic way from 9
billion
pounds in 1993 to about 26
billion
in 2008.
Then
, it experienced a sudden drop to just above 21
billion
and remained relatively stable until 2012, from which it recovered to nearly 24
billion
in 2013. Turning to the graphs with a slight increase, expenditure on business rose from approximately 2
billion
in 1993 to just below 6
billion
in 2008
whereas
that for visiting friends and family increased from around 1
billion
to about 5
billion
over the fifteen years.
While
the former remained slightly higher than the latter, they
finally
stood on the same level there between 2009 and 2013. Looking at the remaining graph, miscellaneous continued to be the lowest with no significant change at around 2
billion
throughout the whole examined period.
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