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The given bar chart represents spending for five main fields in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in 2009.

The given bar chart represents spending for five main fields in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in 2009.
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The given bar chart illustrates the
expenditure
 on 5 various categories in 4 different
nations
 by 2009.
Overall
 , it can be observed that Housing had
most
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the most
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 total spending from all
nations
 ,
whereas
 Health care saw the least .
Additionally
 , most of countries s With regards to the
expenditure
 on Food and Housing where there was an opposite pattern when it comes to
US
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the US
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 and Japan by replacing their position as a country with
highest
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the highest
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 and lowest
expending
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expenses
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. Taking a look at Canada and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom , they accounted for about 15% and 20%
expending
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spending
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that
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which
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 was 5% less than Housing . Turning to the remaining categories where Transportation had
most
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the most
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expenditure
 from all
nations
by
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apply
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making up over 10% . Focusing on Health care , it saw a minority of spending except for
United
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the United
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states
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States
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 which had more than 5%
expenditure
 on
this
 category .
Likewise
 , Clothing comprised
of
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apply
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nearly 10%
expenditure
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of expenditure
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 in all
nations
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, nations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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