Many people choose the travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Some
people
are leaving their cities and the reason for
this
is that they are leaving in order to learn a foreign
language
.
While
there are some benefits of
this
learning, we should not forget about its potential disadvantages. On the one hand, many
people
are leaving to abroad because
learn to
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other languages. Definitely,
this
is
good
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a good
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improvement because they bring good experience
other
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to other
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cities. If many
people
learn a foreign
language
, it is a benefit for their country. It can
also
be
good
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a good
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experience for the young generation. By
traveling
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travelling
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and studying abroad, they can easily understand the
people
of other countries.
For instance
, my friend studied
at
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apply
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the
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apply
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abroad
also
she
is
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apply
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easily
speaking
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the
people
of
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from
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other countries.
Besides
that, foreign languages have many benefits for life.
On the other hand
, there are disadvantages to learning a
language
while
traveling
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travelling
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. In
this
case
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case,
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they have to leave their home town for learning. If they like there and stay, it is
large
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a large
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loss for their country.
That is
,
number
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the number
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of
people
will decrease. It can
also
cause their family members to stay alone.
For example
,my neighbor
leaved to
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left
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abroad for learning
then
his family members remained alone.
However
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he
isn't come
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doesn't come
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to
home
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his home
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town. In conclusion, some
people
travel to another country to study a foreign
language
instead
of studying in their home town.
Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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most
people
could not tell whether
this
was good or bad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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