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Many people choose the travel abroad to learn a foreign language instead of studying in their home town . What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Some
people
 are leaving their cities and the reason for
this
 is that they are leaving in order to learn a foreign
language
.
While
 there are some benefits of
this
 learning, we should not forget about its potential disadvantages. On the one hand, many
people
 are leaving to abroad because
learn to
Verb problem
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 other languages. Definitely,
this
 is
good
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a good
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 improvement because they bring good experience
other
Change preposition
to other
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 cities. If many
people
 learn a foreign
language
, it is a benefit for their country. It can
also
 be
good
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a good
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 experience for the young generation. By
traveling
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travelling
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 and studying abroad, they can easily understand the
people
 of other countries.
For instance
, my friend studied
at
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apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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abroad
also
 she
is
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apply
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easily
speaking
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speaks
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 the
people
of
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from
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 other countries.
Besides
 that, foreign languages have many benefits for life.
On the other hand
, there are disadvantages to learning a
language
while
traveling
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travelling
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. In
this
case
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case,
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 they have to leave their home town for learning. If they like there and stay, it is
large
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a large
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 loss for their country.
That is
 ,
number
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the number
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 of
people
 will decrease. It can
also
 cause their family members to stay alone.
For example
,my neighbor
leaved to
Verb problem
left
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 abroad for learning
then
 his family members remained alone.
However
Add a comma
However,
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 he
isn't come
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doesn't come
hasn't come
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 to
home
Correct pronoun usage
his home
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 town. In conclusion, some
people
 travel to another country to study a foreign
language
instead
 of studying in their home town.
Nevertheless
Add a comma
Nevertheless,
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 most
people
 could not tell whether
this
 was good or bad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic immersion
  • Cultural integration
  • International network
  • Conversational proficiency
  • Financial burden
  • Homesickness
  • Pedagogical differences
  • Culture shock
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