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Many countries have embraced tourism as a way to boost their economies and create jobs for local residents. However, some argue that tourism can have negative impacts on the environment and local cultures. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism for a country

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Over the
last
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 few years, many countries have
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tourism
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 as a way to improve their budgets and provide
works
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work
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 for local populations.
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However
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 some
people
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 think that
tourism
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 can have disadvantages
impacts
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and impacts
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 on the
environment
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 and local traditions. In
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 essay, l will try to discuss both
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the positive
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 and negative sides of
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 and draw a conclusion. On the one hand,
tourism
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 can open door opportunities for local
people
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 and
also
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 provide
with
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them with
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 jobs.
Beside
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 that,
tourism
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 will bring to benefits
government
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the government
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as well as
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 create a
lot
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 jobs or
works
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work
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.
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,
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tourest
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tourist
tourists
 visited popular
history
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historical
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 places
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 need
for
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to
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 stay places
foods
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 service that for pay money.
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, some countries will be rich and popular. In a
word
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tourest
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tourist
 will bring many opportunities and budgets.
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,
visiter
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visitors
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 create jobs yo children and local residents. If children want to know new
languanges
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languages
, they can learn by
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tourest
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tourist
tourists
.
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,
visiter
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visitors
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 can have negative impacts on the
environment
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 and local cultures.
Tourests
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Tourists
 visit
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 there are some problem
an
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and
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 the nature.
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,
people
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 build for
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tourest
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tourist
tourists
 new
hotel
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hotels
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 and
damaged
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to
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apply
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the
environment
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.
Besite
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Beside
 that, they
use
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from
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 drive cars and other vehicles
such
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 cat down trees.
Consequencly
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Consequently
,
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environment
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the environment
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polluted
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is polluted
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. If
people
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condition
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conditions
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 from vehicles,
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environment
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the environment
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 is not air polluted.
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,
tourism
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impact
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impacts
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to
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apply
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traditions
our
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apply
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. Actually,
this
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 is
very
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 bad condition for
childrens
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 future.
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, we may
lost
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 our cultures,
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and tradition
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tradition
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traditions
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. In conclusion,
while
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tourests
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tourists
 visit can offer several positives, there may be some drawbacks too. From my personal point of view, advantages
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 will
outwieght
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outweigh
yhe
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the
 disadvantages.

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coherence cohesion
Focus on organizing your ideas more logically and clearly. Create distinct paragraphs to discuss each advantage and disadvantage separately for better structure.
coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are distinct and clearly summarize your main points. Revisit these sections to make your stance and summary more precise.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with more specific examples. Instead of general statements, use concrete instances or data to illustrate your argument.
task achievement
Provide a more complete response by addressing the task directly. Make sure each paragraph contributes to answering the question, focusing on both the advantages and disadvantages equally.
task achievement
Strive for clearer and more comprehensive ideas. Work on clarity in expressing your thoughts and ensure your essay is easily understandable.
task achievement
Incorporate relevant and specific examples to strengthen your arguments. This adds credibility and depth to your essay, making your points more convincing.
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