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In recent years, women's roles have changed dramatically. What changes have occurred? Do you think these changes are positive or negative

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modern
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rapidly
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happened
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because
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 at the one time. The main reason
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women
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polite
 than men is that they can handle any
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because
 they have emotions which
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situations
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, as a mother they have more emotionally attachedment
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thier doughter
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their daughter
 so if they need some
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help
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their
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their father
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recently
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 that
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daughters
emoticaly
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 attached
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thier
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their
 mother
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because
 as a female they better know
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each other
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their fathers
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. One positive side of
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women
 are highly educated and they can tackle any task with their
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intelligence
skill
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, and great sense of hummer when they
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worst
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That is
 to say that when
women
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role
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 they play a major
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better
team work
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becasue
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because
 they are less
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interested
 or
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involve
involved
 in internal
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politics
instead
 of they work with all males
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member
members
.
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,
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presedent
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president
 of the USA
kamla
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 haris knows about their leadership and
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dedication
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thier
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their
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. In conclusion,
alhough
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although
women
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municipal
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roles
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 in the modern
sociaty becasue
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society because
 of their
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sensitiveness
 and
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capability
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