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Many children who are home-schooled are not prepared for university at the same rate of children in government-funded schools. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

#children #university #rate #schools #effects #society
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 day, some
children
 are being
home schooled
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 with private teachers for various reasons.
Children
 who are home-schooled do not get the same opportunity to make contacts and connections or have the same social context compared to their peers who are attending government-funded schools.
This
 essay will explore the causes of
this
 and what consequences
this
 has on
the
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society. To start with, when
children
 are being home-schooled they rarely have any classmates to talk or cooperate with.
This
 may lead to feelings of isolation or
lonlieness
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loneliness
 or in worst cases even depression.
For instance
, a child who is at home most of the time and
do
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 not have many friends may find it harder in the future to meet new people or make social connections, especially at universities where group projects are in significant part of
the
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education.
This
 leads to home-schooled
children
 not being prepared fully to go to university in the future.
This
 will have many consequences for
the
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society, in terms of work
enviroments
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environments
environment
 and developments for the country.
For example
, if an individual
do
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 not have the ability to cooperate and collaborate with
it´s
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 environment or
collegues
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colleagues
, which is highly valued in today´s global world, will result in no
decions
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decisions
 taken or progress in the company.
Additionally
, world leaders need to have the ability to cooperate and are mandatory to attend social events to work towards world peace. In summary,
to be
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 home-schooled can have a negative impact on your self-esteem
as well as
 getting a lower social context.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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