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People believe that Generation Z (1997-2007) are more dishonest than previous generationsWhat are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative

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There is
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common
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 belief that
Generation
Z
 shows more dishonest
behavior
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compare
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 to other
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generations
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generation
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generations
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. The writer considers that the focal reason for their dishonesty is the improvement of living standards. In
lights
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 of
this
, it will have negative development for society as the quality of output workers will be demolished. It must
be acknowledge
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 that
previous
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the previous
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generation
 had to deal with a substantial of problems, poverty as an example.
As a result
, people had to behave honestly to ensure their work and life.
Nevertheless
,
the
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generation
Z
 exists in an era
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in that
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that
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which
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 most of
living
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 problems are improving.
In other words
,
Generation
Z
are
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 living in a convenient world,
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and meet
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meet
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meeting
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 all the demands
for
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of
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 their life. As people want to possess benefits for their
owns
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,
Generation
Z
 has a tendency to be dishonest with other individuals, showing hesitation of honesty as it will prevent them from reaching their personal purposes.
These kind
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 of attitudes,
however
, will reduce the quality of manual workers. It can be observed that in a specific company, if each
staffs
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 just work for their own
benefits
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benefit
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,
unwilling
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is unwilling
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 to share with their co-worker, telling lies in order to reach their own goals, it will make the company
to
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a competitive place rather than a community that work together to get joint goals.
Consequently
, The output of a worker will not be sufficient. In conclusion, the dishonest
behhavior
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behaviour
 of
Generation
Z
 is
due to
 the enhancement of living quality.
Moreover
, the demolishment of
workforce
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the workforce
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 is the drawback of dishonesty in
Z
generation
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Address all parts of the task, including discussing the reasons for Generation Z's perceived dishonesty and whether this is positive or negative. Include a balanced discussion if the question requires it.
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