The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates the percentage of students
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who participate
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participate
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participated
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in the four different
schools
from 2000 to 2009.
According to
the table, it can be seen that the proportion of children interested in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
dropped slightly
while
the Community
Schools
rose steadily and the less of pupils enrolled was the Specialist
Schools
and the Grammar
Schools
.
In addition
, the Voluntary-controlled
Schools
was
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were
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the highest
to
Change preposition
at
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52% whilst the Specialist and Community
School
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Schools
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was
Verb problem
had
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the
Correct article usage
a
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similar percentage is 12% when
comparison
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compared
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in 2000.
Moreover
, the Community
Schools
was
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apply
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sharply increased to 32% and 58% in 2005 and 2009 respectively
nevertheless
the Voluntary-controlled
Schools
fell to 38% in 2005 and hit a low point
20
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of 20
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% in 2009
On the other hand
, the Grammar
Schools
and the Specialist
Schools
was
downward
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a downward
the downward
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trend and it had
the
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apply
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nearly of percentage was 12% and 10% in the final year.
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