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The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportions of pupils attending four secondary school types between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of students
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who participate
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participate
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participated
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 in the four different
schools
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 from 2000 to 2009.
According to
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 the table, it can be seen that the proportion of children interested in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 dropped slightly
while
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 the Community
Schools
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 rose steadily and the less of pupils enrolled was the Specialist
Schools
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 and the Grammar
Schools
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.
In addition
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, the Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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was
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were
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 the highest
to
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at
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 52% whilst the Specialist and Community
School
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Schools
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was
Verb problem
had
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the
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a
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 similar percentage is 12% when
comparison
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compared
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 in 2000.
Moreover
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, the Community
Schools
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was
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apply
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sharply increased to 32% and 58% in 2005 and 2009 respectively
nevertheless
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 the Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 fell to 38% in 2005 and hit a low point
20
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of 20
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% in 2009
On the other hand
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, the Grammar
Schools
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 and the Specialist
Schools
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 was
downward
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a downward
the downward
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 trend and it had
the
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apply
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nearly of percentage was 12% and 10% in the final year.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words schools with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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