The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.
The bar chart illustrates the information of both
gender
students studies in six Fix the agreement mistake
genders
difference
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different
sciences
courses Fix the agreement mistake
science
at
the United Kingdom in 2019.
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According to
the chart, it can be seen that a higher number
of males
than females
choose to study each subject, with the exception of Veterinary Medicine
.
To begin
with both of
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males
and females
interested
in a Biology subject, there were Add a missing verb
were interested
significant
approximately Correct word choice
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by
240 and 200 learners respectively. The noticeable from Change preposition
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the
all subjects Remove the article
apply
is
Physics that have over 200 men Change the verb form
are
while
the number
of women under 50 people so there were four times as many male students as female students. Moreover
, the number
of males
have
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similar
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a similar
the similar
number
in Astronomy and Geology were
150 people and Unnecessary verb
apply
Veterinary
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the Veterinary
Medicine
subject has females
than Correct quantifier usage
more females
males
approximately 25 people.
To summarize, the
mostly Correct article usage
apply
females
favored
Biology, Change the spelling
favoured
Medicine
, and Veterinary Medicine
. On the other
hand
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hand,
males
prefer to
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Medicine
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males, females, medicine with synonyms.
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