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the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.

the map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbition and planned future development of the site.
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Thw
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The
 two maps illustrate the proposal of future changes
an
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in an
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 industrial
area
 in the city of
Norbition
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Norton
. 
Overall
, in the future, the factory
area
 will have been completely transformed with new facilities
such
 as
school
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schools
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, shops and houses and new roads. Looking
further
 into the details, today in the north-east has
factory
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a factory
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 section.
This
 section will be turning into a housing development.
Addionatly
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Additionally
, there are plans to construct
new
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 school, playground
area
 and medical centre near to the houses. Meanwhile,the main road will
extent
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 to connect with the new residential
area
 and shops in the north-west. The river
is locate
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 in the north of the industrial
area
. A railway road will
build
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be built
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, crossing the industrial
area
 to
new
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a new
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 housing
area
. The farmland will relocate
in
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to
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 the north-east of the Norbiton industrial
area
.
However
, the town will not
under go
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undergo
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 any changes.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned development
  • existing facilities
  • proposed changes
  • infrastructure
  • public spaces
  • sustainable development
  • green spaces
  • pollution control
  • local community
  • job creation
  • amenities
  • property values
  • displacement
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
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