A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at University. He or she has asked for your advice about studying this subject write a letter to your friend in your letter? •give details of the course you took at the University : Nursing course , with 3 years of master's degree •explain why you recommend the university : experienced teachers, resources • give some advice about how to apply , website , contact receptionist

Dear Annie, I hope you're well . I'm thrilled to find out that you made a great decision to study nursing at the
University
of British Columbia . About 3 years ago , I completed my master's in the nursing field at the
University
of
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British Columbia and got the job immediately . So,
this
course
include
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3 years of master's degree with
one year
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internship abroad. Apart from that , students in
this
field need to go for
a
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crash training with professionals for clear main exams .After exams , consultants will help you to make
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resume for your future jobs. I definitely recommend the
University
to you because it has more experienced teachers and
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success rate of students hired from the UBC. There are
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of ways to apply to
this
course
. I would suggest
to apply
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online as soon as possible because
this
course
is high in demand and limited seats available . Another method to apply for
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is
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the
University
and fill
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application form available at the front desk . If you have any
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regarding
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then
visit www.helping.com and submit your question , you will get
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in two business days . Please call me soon . Best wishes, Roopkamal Kaur.
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Task Achievement
To enhance task response, ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed thoroughly. While your letter covers the main aspects, expanding on the benefits of the course and giving more detailed advice on the application process could strengthen your response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve coherence by linking ideas more effectively within paragraphs. Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., furthermore, however, similarly) to create smoother transitions between sentences.
General Advice
Pay attention to aspects like grammatical accuracy and range of vocabulary. Although not directly scored here, they significantly impact the overall clarity and professionalism of your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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