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propaganda poster of isis Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the phenomenon.

#propaganda #poster #isis #phenomenon
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poster
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, in my opinion, was considerate enough to influent both two groups of audiences that
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 aims at.
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, speaking of the audience who is ardent to join
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poster
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 is truly attractive.
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 occasions reflection upon the bravery of fighters of the Islamic
state
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 of Iraq and Syria (
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)
violated
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who violated
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 the US, the most powerful country in the world, by putting a bomb on the US. The next
audiences
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 who wanted to be
considering
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 in
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concerne
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concern
 is the
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 nation;
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 is reckoned to be un of the most dangerous literature that
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 has created so far
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 because it could terrify the civilians of the
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 country.
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 it is not just
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poster
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, in which
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 has created many more of
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 movie and photos.
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 content could terrify citizens of
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 because
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possiblity
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possibility
 of happening another disaster similar to 9/11. Aside from that,
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most of the propaganda materials that
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 creates typically involve the use of violence in order to
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 fear in their adversary, but
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 billboard does not do so.
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 is a very brilliant method, in my opinion, because
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 billboard may spread to a wider audience without being censored.
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, we can find
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 on social media, on Google, and even in the news.
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 is evidence that the strategy that
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 employs is having a great deal of success. In spite of the fact that
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 picture did not have any violent elements,
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poster
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 has the potential to effectively spread terror among the people in the United States of America,
as well as
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 among the people in
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 countries.
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Structuring
Ensure your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. State your main argument or topic sentence early to guide the reader.
Paragraphing
Organize your main points logically. Begin each paragraph with a clear topic sentence, followed by explanations, examples, and a concluding sentence.
Supporting Ideas
Support your main points with more detailed, developed examples or evidence to strengthen your argument.
Task Response
Clearly address the advantages and disadvantages of the phenomenon as asked in the prompt. Make sure your response provides a balanced view or examines both sides of the issue.
Content Relevance
Avoid sensitive or potentially offensive topics that might not be appropriate for the IELTS writing task. Choose examples and subjects that are universally acceptable.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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