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The chart below gives information about the cultural changes among people in Germany and the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about the cultural changes among people in Germany and the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart is about the cultural difference between
Germany
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 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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. As we can see, there are different
aspect
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aspects
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 of comparison. There is only one aspect where two countries are similar and
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 "Power Distance." Here, both the countries are about 35%.
United
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The United
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Kingdom
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 is
more
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far
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 ahead
than
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of
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Germany
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 in industrialism reaching almost 90%.
Similarly
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,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 is the winner in indulgence as well.
On the other hand
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,
Germany
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 is nearly double in the uncertainty avoidance aspect reaching nearly 65%.
Additionally
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, in pragmatism
also
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Germany
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defeats
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defeated
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United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 by nearly 35%.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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