The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the amount of physical activity done on a regular basis by Australian people, sorted
according to
their genders and ages in the year 2010.
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regular physical activity varied Unnecessary verb
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groups and genders. The gap between males and females who enjoy doing physical activity regularly was by far at its highest level in the Use synonyms
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35 to 44 (13 Use synonyms
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it declined to its lowest level in the Linking Words
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65 and over ( 0.4 Use synonyms
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The popularity of being physically active among males experienced a downward trend in the first three Change the spelling
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groups and peaked again at 46.7 Use synonyms
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65 and over.
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the popularity
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upward trend in the first four Correct your spelling
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