The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The graph illustrates the amount of physical activity done on a regular basis by Australian people, sorted
according to
their genders and ages in the year 2010.
It is clear that
popularity
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the popularity
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regular physical activity varied Unnecessary verb
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according to
both age
groups and genders. The gap between males and females who enjoy doing physical activity regularly was by far at its highest level in the age
group
35 to 44 (13 percent
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per cent
while
it declined to its lowest level in the age
group
65 and over ( 0.4 percent
).
The popularity of being physically active among males experienced a downward trend in the first three Change the spelling
per cent
age
group
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groups
13.3
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a 13.3
percent
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in the next three Correct your spelling
around
age
groups and peaked again at 46.7 percent
in the Change the spelling
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age
group
65 and over.
The trend for popularity
of being active among women saw Add an article
the popularity
and
upward trend in the first four Correct your spelling
an
age
group
and peaked at 53.3 Fix the agreement mistake
groups
percent
in the fourth Change the spelling
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age
group
(45 to 54). This
reduced a bit in the next age
group
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to
its lowest level in the Change preposition
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last
one, which accounts for 47.1 percent
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